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In many countries schools have severe problems with students behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Schools
 are the
center
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 of learning and the assemblies for children and teenagers. One of the numerous
problems
 of
schools
 is
students
behavior
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behaviour
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, which
are
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is
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 very common and we have seen for a long time.
This
 essay is going to state the
causes
 and the solutions
of
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this
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these
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problems
.
To begin
 with, there are two main
causes
 of
students
' acts
problems
; the
first
 is that
schools
 have too many
rules
 to follow and the
second
 is that children are
skeptical
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 and want to try something new. For the
first
causes
, there is a myriad of regulations in
schools
. These make
students
 do not want to do
along
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 those
rules
. They become interferences of their activities during
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apply
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school time and easily admitted punishments.
For instance
, there are both 'Do not sleep' and 'No snacks' laws
which
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that
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 bother
students
 in their class time.
Thus
,
students
 do not follow them anymore. For the
second
causes
,
normal
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the normal
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behaviors
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behaviours
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 of children and teenagers are generally
agaisnt
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against
 regulations which regulate them. These ages are not happy with orders.
Moreover
, they love to try something new
instead
 of being only in classes. So,
orders
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the orders
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 of
schools
 may not affect
students
. There is
a
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 main exit for
this
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these
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problems
; teachers and
students
 should talk and make an agreement
of
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on
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 the
rules
. When they negotiate with each other, the best
rules
 are appeared, along with the happiness
in
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 both sides.
For example
, the
rules
 will have
the
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a
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 balance between the school's calmness and the
students
' freedom. To conclude, the
causes
 of the
students
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student's
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behavior
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behaviour
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 problem are stated in
this
 essay.
Furthermore
, the solutions are
also
 discussed above. I hope that those will be useful and make
this
 problem
dissappeared
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disappeared
disappear
.
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