Today’s food travel thousands of miles before it reaches the customer. Some people say that it would be better for the economy and environment if people ate food produced from local farmers. Would the advantages of this idea outweigh the disadvantages?

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In today's world, many

foods

are sent to other corners of the world for

food

's fans.

Although

this

method may have some economical and environmental benefit, personally I believe that there

are

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a wide range of negative aspects.

FIrst

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of all, these

foods

are full of different taste and smell which can attract many young

people

. most of the international dishes are interesting for teenagers because they want to try something new at

this

period

specially

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food

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the food

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category. In my country, many of them are

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apply

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huge fan of

the

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Chinese's restaurant and spend a lot of money for finding the new taste of

food

Moreover

, a variety of choice is given to

peaple

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people

. It means that local

foods

are limit and there is no new meal in

people

's daily routine. As a

resault

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result

, they tend to change their meals easily by

eat

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other types of dishes.

In contrast

, there are some negative aspects for both

people

and local restaurant. Internasional

foods

not only reduce the economic of the local meals but

also

they are not as fresh as the home-

foods

. In fact, they damage the economics of the home country

food

and it brings low quality. After some time,

people

lose their interest in mothers-

food

, which prevent

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them to

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buy and support some local items.

For example

, in my

country

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,country

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people

avoid buying rice, all of the rice production will be destroyed and it is a critical heat to the local financial system.

In addition

, many of the raw materials of the are spoiled during the travel which lead customers into the sickness. It is obvious they are not fresh and a long time

are

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spent to receive.

This

is why some of them lost their quality. So it is better for us to use the

foods

that come from our culture. In conclusion, many global dishes have served in countries which bring a different culture of the other county but there is no good replacement for the local meals.

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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