Today’s food travel thousands of miles before it reaches the customer. Some people say that it would be better for the economy and environment if people ate food produced from local farmers. Would the advantages of this idea outweigh the disadvantages?

In today's world, many
foods
are sent to other corners of the world for
food
's fans.
Although
this
method may have some economical and environmental benefit, personally I believe that there
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a wide range of negative aspects.
FIrst
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of all, these
foods
are full of different taste and smell which can attract many young
people
. most of the international dishes are interesting for teenagers because they want to try something new at
this
period
specially
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in
food
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the food
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category. In my country, many of them are
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huge fan of
the
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Chinese's restaurant and spend a lot of money for finding the new taste of
food
.
Moreover
, a variety of choice is given to
peaple
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people
. It means that local
foods
are limit and there is no new meal in
people
's daily routine. As a
resault
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result
, they tend to change their meals easily by
eat
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other types of dishes.
In contrast
, there are some negative aspects for both
people
and local restaurant. Internasional
foods
not only reduce the economic of the local meals but
also
they are not as fresh as the home-
foods
. In fact, they damage the economics of the home country
food
and it brings low quality. After some time,
people
lose their interest in mothers-
food
, which prevent
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buy and support some local items.
For example
, in my
country
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if
people
avoid buying rice, all of the rice production will be destroyed and it is a critical heat to the local financial system.
In addition
, many of the raw materials of the are spoiled during the travel which lead customers into the sickness. It is obvious they are not fresh and a long time
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spent to receive.
This
is why some of them lost their quality. So it is better for us to use the
foods
that come from our culture. In conclusion, many global dishes have served in countries which bring a different culture of the other county but there is no good replacement for the local meals.
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