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Some parents say that children should play individually more than in a group. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and include your own opinion.

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Few people think that
Children
 should be encouraged to play alone than with their
friends
.
This
 essay will talk about
merits
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 and demerits of allowing
Children
 to play games single and with
friends
.  On one hand ,by permitting
Children
 to
spending
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 time alone in activities one can get rid of conflicts raising among
children
 while playing.
Moreover
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 there won’t be any disturbance to surrounding people;
also
 parents may be out of fear of
children
 getting hurt by playing with their peers.
For
example
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 If
children
 are provided with video games
then
 they can play happily seating in their comfort zone.
Moreover
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 things would not be broken down by playing alone than in groups. 
On the other hand
, the drawbacks of playing individual are social skills are hampered. By encouraging
children
 to play in groups
team work
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 will be taught. It
also
 makes
children
 realize the importance of
friends
 in life.
Moreover
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 they can share their happy and sad moments with each other. In
this
way
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 they can encourage one another in their ups and downs. They can get exposed to different levels of knowledge. In my
opinion
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Children
 should be encouraged to play with their
friends
instead
 of being played alone; the advantages of which are explained in
above
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 essay.
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