It has been argued that giving gifts to friends and family should not be encouraged, because money is often wasted on things that people do not like or want. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In today's world,
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try to appreciate or show their
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to one another by giving
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there are arguments that those
gifts
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often are wasted if the
people
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do not want that present or they already have it.
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I already have an iPhone and if anyone gives me another
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it would just be useless because I won't be able to use two phones at the same time.
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a feeling of love or joy for friends and family to exchange
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with each other on special occasions. Sometimes, I disagree that
money
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is wasted on things
people
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don't want. Because it's a way of certain
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expressing love to their friends and family
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it should not
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be thought of
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as waste
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it should be appreciated.
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, there are
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who agree with
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thought that the
money
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is
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being misspent
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misspent
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mispent
on
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gifts
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, there was a time when one of my friends gifted me the gym equipment,
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I did not need that when I received it, I started using that equipment in order to keep myself healthy.
On the other hand
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, I think
money
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is wasted if you buy presents which
people
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do not want. Because you don't know what
people
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need or already have in their homes.
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you buy them a gift which they already have
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that gift is left in the corner unused.
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you are giving them
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something,
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it's better to have enough information about the person you are gifting. Like, when I gifted my friend an
apple watch
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Apple Watch
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. I knew he was looking for the watch
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since he has all the
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Apple
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products except the watch, I decided to give him the watch
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he really liked it a lot. In conclusion, I think it depends on what and to whom you are gifting the presents
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. If you already know that personal choice, you will end up giving the right thing which he/she will like
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the gift will
useless
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be useless
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and
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, the
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spent on that thing is misspent.

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Say clearly what you think at the start and keep that view to the end.
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Make the links between ideas simple and clear. Use short words to show the order of ideas.
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