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In many countries people throw away lot of food from restaurant and shop. Why do you think people waste food in this way? What can be done to reduce waste?

#countries #people #food #restaurant #shop #waste
it is true that
people
 expel eatable items from
restaurant
 and
food
 shops.
This
eassy
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essay
easy
 discuss what makes
people
to
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do so along with some possible solutions that may be implemented to alleviate the problem. it is often a trend in recent years that many
people
 frequently
visits
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restaurant
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 to eat.As
food
 items will be prepared according to the average number of
people
 who visits the
restaurant
 on day to day basis.in
this
 way sometimes
food
 will be excess and few times it will be less.As cooked
food
 cannot be used on
next
 day
managment
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management
 will throw away the excess
food
 in order to maintain hygiene and provide quality of
food
 to the customers.
This
 is the primary and foremost reason for
food
to
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be wasted.in economic times journal it is published that 33%
excess
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food
 was being wasted by the management. The
possibe
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possible
 solution to
this
 problem is collecting the excess
food
 from restaurants and shop and giving it to
the
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charity homes or to the
people
 who are in desperate hunger.
government
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the government
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 should encourage the management to inform the charity homes or respective
people
 when there is excess
food
 .so in
these way
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 excess
food
 can be used wisely and save poor
people
 who are in search of
food
. In conclusion,as
people
 throw
lot
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 of
left over
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leftover
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food
 from
restaurant
 and shop.Steps must be taken by the Government to provide the excess
food
 to the needy ones.
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