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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people belive it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people #belive
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population
 density and prosperity in various areas. Looking at the form of these bars, it becomes evident that North America, Europe and rich Asia-Pacific
countries
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. North America has roughly about 6% of
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, but obtain the greatest richness – 36%.
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 of people and 30
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 of
wealth
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. Another situation is in India, China, Africa and other Asia-Pacific
countries
, where the percentage of humanity is high, but the level of welfare is nowhere near enough. The most dramatic trend is in India, 16% of humans possess only 1% of
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. In
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about a quarter of the world
population
 but only 3% of
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wealth
 share. To sum up,
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 bar chart reveals that mostly populated regions have a low level of welfare.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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