Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning the local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how ?

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Dear Admissions Committee: My name is Lt.Nitipong Sirinikorn. After I graduated from Chulachomklao Royal Military Academy my

first

position in the battalion was a Platoon Leader and now I am a Radio Relay Company Commander.

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According

to my passion to be an EE lecturer at

CRMA

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wold

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like to

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Master

degree

Telecommunications

. As the result, I can develop

CRMA

cadets to become experts in

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communications, and they will

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professionally work and play important roles in communication units all over the world.

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military communication security.

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, my main aim is to develop the quality of EE education in

CRMA

and influence

CRMA

cadets to create telecommunication innovations for the Royal Thai army. After 2 years of work, I plan to

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Master

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to follow my career goal. My best option for my graduate studies is a

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Engineering in

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program at AIT. For the following reasons, I will

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in a multicultural environment so I will get higher social skills from

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experience with other students who come from many countries. In my opinion, AIT is one of the great

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for international

study

. I decide to apply for a

Master

degree

in Engineering in

Telecommunications

at AIT because it is famous for developing highly qualified engineers and technologists who play leading roles in the

Telecommunications

sector.

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graduate program in M.E.

Telecommunications

will give me the insight, essential skills and knowledge for being a qualified EE lecturer at

CRMA

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my dream,

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significant opportunity for me to join the ICT faculty in

Telecommunications

. Eventually, I hope to receive your generosity for giving me a place in your university. My vision is to create real change for the army¿s cadets and keep themselves up-to-date to the technologies. Sincerely. Lt.Nitipong Sirinikorn

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

311 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

global communication
economic opportunities
cultural diversity
endangered
linguistic heritage
inclusive
multilingualism
language revitalization
language policy
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