Some people think that puplic health is a the responsibility of the government while others think people should be responsible for their own health. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Everyone desire better
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, the majority of
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believe that public
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health
is an accountability of the government while others consider every
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accountable for their own
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. In my opinion , both views are relevant. On the one hand , the government should be careful with
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many-sided
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to public
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. Since
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the government
is consisting of
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. If
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die more , the government
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die.
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authority establishes some rules in order to maintain public
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. A prime example of
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could be Covid-19 ,that time the number of countries implant restrictions and keep a lot of
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's lives whilst other authorities did not pay attention so much and implant very little limitation .
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in that
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country
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more
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died.
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, everyone's
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is necessary
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for themselves . If they want to be a healthy person , they should care for themself .
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eating healthy food , every half year goes to the doctor consult and do sport.
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they do not want it , not only doctors but
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fascinator does not help them. In conclusion , not only authority but
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people
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responsible for their own
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.
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the latter more .
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