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The line graphs illustrate tons of
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 is spent with parents by children in various
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groups
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. We can be seen that the three different
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groups
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 (under 1
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 ,4-5 and 8-9) spend roughly 2
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 for the
father
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, compared to 5
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 with the mom during the weekdays. The remaining
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groups
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 take around 1.5
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 with fathers whereas approximately 6
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 with mothers from Monday to Friday. At the same period , all
of
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apply
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age
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the age
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groups
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 in children play with both mothers and
father
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, which is 1.5 - 2
hours
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. It is clear that the most
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 of parents is set aside for toddlers who are all of
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age
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the age
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groups
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 about 5 - 6
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. In comparison with mothers, around 3 to 4
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.
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, the number of
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 look after infants the
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last
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 ( only 0.5 to 1
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 ) on Saturday and Sunday. In conclusion, the infants play with their mother most of the
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 during the week rather than their
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