Some feel that the effects of advertising are positive for individuals and businesses, while others think they are negative. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Advertisment
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Advertisement
can determine people buying behaviour.
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is
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main factor of
business
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world because
this
can stimulate the
folks
to buy goods.
However
, a fair amount of people think that the effects of advert
gives
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more benefits to the person as well as
business
, while others believe that
this
might be stimulated negative side. Viewing from a general perspective,
this
essay discusses both viewpoints, I agree with the former opinion for the following reasons.
To begin
with,
announcement
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the announcement
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gives more benefits to the marketing field and people too. The
folks
can understand of new
product
and how to use and how long use all details are available in one ad
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therefore
the population will know the certain goods before using.
The businesses
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are easily expand
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their stuff by ad and create the demand of the particular stuff
as a result
, the
business man
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do
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not put more effort
to
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sales their
product
. Some
campanies
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companies
goods are easily registered to the
folks
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mind not only the
product
name but
also
the company name all credit goes to adverts.
On the other hand
,
this
trend has some negative effects.
This
type of adverts will trigger to the community buy unwanted
things
and
this
will create the unhealthy
competitation
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competition
among the organisation
as a result
sometimes
the
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the quality of the things
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things
quality not good.
This
type of billing will make the monopoly seller.
For instance
, according to the survey said that
,
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more than 75% of billing displays unwanted
things
whereas they can trigger indirectly by using attractive songs and popular person feedback. To conclude, the billing
are
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able to change the guy mind and
this
has some drawbacks too.
However
, in my
opinon
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opinion
about
this
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the blurb can inspire
wrong
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way to
the
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individuals as well as
business
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a business
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because nowadays
folks
judge the
things
details and description through the blurb I think
this
is not a good way. I hope
this
can lead to
increase
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the fake
product
among
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society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advertising
  • positive effects
  • negative effects
  • individuals
  • businesses
  • awareness
  • information
  • entertainment
  • discounts
  • promotions
  • job opportunities
  • increased sales
  • profits
  • brand visibility
  • recognition
  • competitive advantage
  • product diversification
  • service diversification
  • influence
  • consumer behavior
  • unrealistic standards
  • beauty
  • invasion of privacy
  • financial pressure
  • high costs
  • misleading practices
  • deceptive practices
  • negative publicity
  • reputation damage
  • increased competition
  • balancing
  • ethical advertising
  • responsible advertising
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