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Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society?

#pollution #rivers #lakes #seas #concern #people #environment #water #effects #life #society
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Pollution
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 of rivers, lakes, seas and other natural
water
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resources
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 is a very huge problem for our nature, for
enviroment
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environment
environments
 where people are
excisting
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existing
.
Cause
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 of
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 in the fact that the
level
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 of
enviromental
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environmental
pollution
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 has a
straitgh
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straight
 influence on the
level
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 of quality of our lives. And mostly the
level
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 of
enviromental
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environmental
pollution
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 depends
from
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on
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 the
level
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 of
pollution
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 of natural
water
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resources
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 as the rivers, lakes, seas and oceans. The main reason
of
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that is
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 because of the fact that natural
water
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resources
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 are the main source of
water
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wich
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which
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 all creatures, including man
of
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 course, are using to drink. And
water
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, as we know, is the main thing for
life
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the life
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 existence. And for our sorrow, the main causes of
water
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pollution
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 is the result of activity
wich
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which
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 human society is making while
its
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 functioning. The most popular, in bad meaning, of
course
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 are the disasters which are providing by shipwrecking of oil tanks, nuclear explosions near the natural
water
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resources
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 and utilization of remnants in rivers or seas causing by human activity, mostly in big cities. All of
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 has a huge effect on animal life and human society.
Becase
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Because
 of oil tanks shipwrecking the sea creatures have not enough
of
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apply
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oxigen
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oxygen
 in the
water
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 and dying. There are
also
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 a lot of examples when people saw
hundrends
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hundreds
 of
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whales
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wales
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whales
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, dolphins,
turtules
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turtles
 and other sea
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inhabitants
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habitants
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habitats
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which
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who
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 were jumping from the
water
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 to the
seacost
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seacoast
 and died
there after
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thereafter
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 the
excidents
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accidents
accident
 with oil tanks in the sea.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contamination
  • industrial discharge
  • untreated sewage
  • agricultural runoff
  • pesticides
  • oil spills
  • microplastics
  • eutrophication
  • algal blooms
  • marine dumping
  • bioaccumulation
  • ecosystem
  • biodiversity
  • public health
  • waterborne diseases
  • fishing industry
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable practices
  • environmental regulations
  • waste management
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