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In many developing countries, there is an increasing movement of workers from rural areas into the cities. why do you think this happens? What problems can this cause?

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The given graph illustrates the different kinds of
free-time
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 activities and these were done by the elderly
peoples
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 from 1980 to the present in the United
States
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. Overall,it was clear that watching TV was the most made
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activity
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 by
peoples
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 in the United
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 in early 1980. In 2000, it was not as popular as in the early decade.
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,the percentage of manufacture by elderly
peoples
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 was a little bit increase,from 60% in 1980 to 65% in the present.For hiking,it was only 20% done by
peoples
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 in the start of 1980 but surprisingly it was gradually advance to 80% and reach the peach in 2000. Meanwhile, leisure activities like reading and surfing the internet totally progressed from the ratios of 30% to 60% and 5 % to 50 % by the early
peoples
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 in the United
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 during the given period.
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,the theatre
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activity
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 performs by the
peoples
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 in the United
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 has a percentage of 50% in the older decade but becoming to the modern decade,the percentage of theatre by elderly
peoples
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 was a little bit decline to 45%. In short,in the early century watching TV was the most popular and acted
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 by
peoples
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 in the United
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.
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,when the modern century arrived hiking became the most likely
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 among the other
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 activities and watching TV still remained the
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 most spent
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activity
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