The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given graphs show

that

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apply

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the comparison between overseas

students

and local

students

enrolled in Australian universities in a decade (from 2001 - 2010). Locals

students

enrolled in Australian universities

are

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far exceeded overseas

students

and overseas

students

are constantly

increased

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. In 2001, there were four hundred

thousands

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students

local

students

enrolled in Australian universities, twenty times more than overseas

students

. After that, the numbers of both sides are rising. In 2007-2010, the number of local

students

remained at six hundred

thousands

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thousand

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. By 2010, the number of local

students

is six hundred thousand and the number of overseas

students

is eighty thousand. Local

students

still

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are still

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have more

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than overseas

students

, but the gap has narrowed to around 7 times.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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