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The two maps of the park give information about the changes in the past compared to the present time. Overall, a lot of modifications have been adjusted. The
area
 has become an open place following the removal of gates. In the year 1980, the layout of the
area
 was limited being surrounded by walls on four sides with two gates situating to the west and the north. The
next
 point is that there was an L-shaped road relatively locating amidst the map. In the western innermost
area
 of the main road, there was a recreational place with a pond and benches on the top and flowers place on the bottom.
Furthermore
, a cluster of trees situated on the top right-hand of the map and flowers bed on the bottom side. Nowadays, the boundary walls have been removed making the
area
 an open way. The main road has been expanded to the north and the east sides that divide the
area
 into four sectors. The
first
 one is located in the northeast, the
area
 used to have trees, now they have been removed making way to the picnic chairs and desks for barbecue purposes.
Additionally
, flower areas have been replaced by a bush and a playground respectively from the east to the west sides. In conclusion, the whole
area
 has been observing many changes since 1980. The general overlay of it relatively stays the same aiming to a hectic
area
.
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