When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Normally, when choosing a
job
, everyone will find the
job
based on
good
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a good
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salary
instead
of
well-paid
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a well-paid
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job
.
That is
what I totally disagree with it because having
high
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a high
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salary
is very good, but
others
important things
also
need when
applying
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forapplying
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a
job
. According to
me
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my
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, I imagine that
although
it cannot be solved only with money basically, it will be needed by someone to solve their personal problems.
For instance
, the one who
migrate
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migrates
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to a big city for
working
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work
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will need
high
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a high
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income as the cost of livings
such
as
cost
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the cost
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of flat, food, health care and other costs are not very small. And, some people have to support
to
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apply
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their family with their incomes.
Therefore
, it is normal when choosing
the
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a
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job
, the
salary
is the most important consideration for them. If they choose the
job
based on their hobbies or happiness, it does not matter what kinds of jobs or how much
salary
is it.
In addition
, even though the one who has
very
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a very
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high
salary
for their special things or has a good
salary
by having their respective good qualities and degrees, it should
be take
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be taking
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action on
the
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the views or opinions of the other
the other's views or opinions
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others
views or opinions. That means, for examples, it cannot be convenient for him in a
job
if there are no
any
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apply
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respects
on
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for
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the other
job
partners or having selfish minds that will cause
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apply
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the
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them
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problems with the
others
. So, it does not matter how much
salary
does he get and can even be fired from
job
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his job
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as a result
.
Therefore
, in the
job
, the
salary
is not the most important considerations when choosing a
job
. To conclude, in my opinion, having
high
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a high
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salary
is very good, yet the one who should be convenient with the
others
and should go with the flow surely in
job
Submitted by Shwe Yamin on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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