Many people work from home using modern technology today. Some people think that only the workers benefit from this and not the employer. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Due to advancements in
technology
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the percentage of
employees
working from home has been increased drastically.
Certain
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section of people
believe
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that only the
employees
are
benefitied
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benefited
benefitted
benefiting
from
this
not
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the company.
This
essay totally disagrees with the
above mentioned
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statement that only
employees
are benefited. On one hand, Work from home has so many benefits
such
as the operating cost of the office is
decerased
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decreased
decorated
which saves
lot
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of money
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inturn
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can be utilised for recruiting
the
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new
employess
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employees
as per the requirement of the business.
In addition
, the time for lunch and travel is reduced and can ask
employees
to work for long hours which will increase the productivity.
On the other hand
, technology demands long working hours as a physical connection between the team is low. To cope up with the pressure the
employees
are sitting for
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time
infront
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in front
of
system
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the system
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which is not good for health both physically and mentally. Even they are unable to spend quality time with their family. Health problems like
spondilities
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spondylitis
and cervical pain problems are more
comman
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common
these days among the middle age people. In conclusion, it is certainly true that both the
employees
and company are gaining profits with the new inventions of the technology by changing new working methods.
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