Tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly negative impact on local inhabitants and the environment. However, others claim that it is good for the economy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and give your own opinion.

The average person might say that the
tourism
industry
has been declining in
the
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recent
Years
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but the truth is that
tourism
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industry
has been experiencing rapid growth in the coming years and has been projected to grow even more in the coming years. Debates have been started by individuals, few of them stating that
tourism
is good for the
economy
while a few others say that the
industry
has taken a toll on the local residents and
environment
. But whether or not the fact that either side is definitively right is up for debate. A few advantages of the
tourism
industry
is that it provides a good source of revenue to a
country
.
For example
,
countries
like Dubai and Singapore are
a
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tourism driven
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economy
,
this
means that
the
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tourism
is the backbone of the
economy
and a fall in
tourism
will likely create a decline in the
economy
. Another advantage of the
tourism
industry
is that it provides more employment opportunities for the people of the
country
.
For example
, a survey conducted by the National University of Singapore (NUS) shows that increased
tourism
numbers
have
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lead to more employment opportunities not only in the
tourism
sector but
also
in various other sectors
such
as the entertainment sector. The
third
and final advantage
this
essay will include is the promotion of another
countries
culture. When one visits another
country
he or she is likely to learn about the
countries
culture and
this
will create more diversity and may help prevent racism and create a secular
country
. The
tourism
industry
also
has its fair share of disadvantages. One
such
disadvantage is that
tourism
may impact the
countries
environment
as the
environment
may not be able to sustain itself due to a higher influx of people.
This
was seen in Zimbabwe where elevated tourist numbers damaged its
environment
and wildlife as more pollution threatened its ecosystem. Another disadvantage is the fact that more
tourism
can cause more traffic jams and cause problems
to
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the people of a
country
. In
countries
such
as
India
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it is estimated that 20% of traffic is caused due to
tourism
. In conclusion,
tourism
has many benefits to the
economy
of a
country
and can help raise a
country
’s Gross Domestic Product (GDP) as well.
However
, the government
also
needs to bear in mind its
environment
and must invest
on
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preserving
as
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the
environment
is equally if not more important than the
tourism
sector.
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