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Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others. Do you agree or disagree?

#television #free-time #people
In recent times, the effect of how individuals use their free
time
 is being debated often. Some people are of the opinion that watching the TV in one's free
time
 makes them lazy and decrease their interaction with others. I personally believe that your spare period should be used
doing
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 what you are most comfortable with. In my essay, I am going to present why I have a different view on
this
 issue. Many adults are engaged in daily activities that bring them in contact with other people,
for example
, going to the office daily brings you in touch with your colleagues
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who
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 you interact
with
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frequently during the work hour throughout your working week. The urge to have some alone moments during your spare period, far from interacting with your co-workers and
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 attendant stress, should not be considered as being dead-beat, but rather as a period of
rejuvination
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rejuvenation
 and relaxation. Indeed, psychologists have shown through various experiments and publications, that about 90% of people who take
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 few minutes to engage in an activity they love,
such
 as watching a movie,
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 to lower their blood
pressur
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pressure
.
Although
, watching a sporting activity may be considered as wasted
time
, the emotional reward if your team wins is not quantifiable,
thus
 the notion that
indiduals
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individuals
 who engage in
such
 are not being productive is flawed. Adults should be allowed to spent their
time
 as they deem fit without others being judgmental. In my final submission, I
stongly
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strongly
 disagree with the notion that
time
 spent watching the screen implies laziness
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 because
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 actual fact, it supports recovery from a stressful life and an
oppourtunity
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opportunity
 to maintain your mental health.
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