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The charts below show proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition English, in 2000 and 2010.
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Two pie charts reveal
about
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the percentages of British
students
 studying in a university in the United Kingdom
were
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 capable of conversating in languages other than the English
language
 during the
year
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 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, it is evident that the proportion of
the
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students
, who can communicate in one or two more languages, apart from English has increased by 5 per cent each in the later
year
 compared to the earlier.
In addition
, we can clearly see a 50% decline in the number of
students
 who could speak only
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the English
language
 during the same time span.
Students
 who could speak only the Spanish
language
 showed a rise of 5% in the
year
 2010 which was 30% in the
year
 2000. The German speakers remained unchanged at 10
per
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cent,
whereas
 the French speakers went down by 5%. The combined percentages of
the
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students
 who could communicate in more than one
language
 were 25% of the whole in the
year
 2000, which became 35% in the
year
 2010.
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