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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation , such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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In the contemporary world, people have different view about the majority of the population embrace
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unfortunate circumstances which are unsatisfactory careers or a financial crisis.
Nevertheless
, others opposed to
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 arguments and they believe that making an effort to overcome difficulties
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is one of the best methods. In my opinion, I am in favour of overcoming difficulties by the attempt to acquire the qualification. There are several obvious reasons why people might argue that the number of people sticks to a comfortable zone which is unable to suffer vulnerable circumstances as well as they could not stand to face
this
.
In addition
, it may be a repercussion about mental health for us.
For instance
, when the new graduate students apply
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new position suitable for their field with high income in
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 reputable company. Unfortunately, the employer rejects their application and
then
 the person decides to choose the position which is not suitable for their competence . It
also
 an unsatisfactory occupation with a non-high salary which you desire .
This
 is due to the fact that the decision may avoid the stressful problems which cause-effect mental health problems.
In addition
,
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life will be easier for them. Earning a little
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money with unsatisfactory can maintain their life.
On the other hand
, I still believe that enhancing our abilities is the best method to escape a comfortable zone of ourselves. To be more precise, the obstacles will happen for our life or job in the basic regular
hence
 improving skills is the pivotal method in order to seize the moment or solve the problems by the way of exploring new things or learning someone around us.
Moreover
, a positive mindset can help us overcome many obstacles better. Take the example of, IU
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a famous Korea-singer , she failed numerous talent tests as well as she was received
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 of rejection from many companies.
Nevertheless
, she does not give up everything.
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also
 aware of her abilities level which is not enough. she continues to improve her skills in performance and her voice.
In addition
, she practices their skills day by day
although
 difficulties constantly interfere with her. The result that IU gains her success
such
 as she is the most of solo-singer have a huge fan around the worlds as well as acquire a ton of awards
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with along
 her career. All in all, it is my strong conviction that endless effort bringing us a number of substantial benefits, among which is the worst circumstances
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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