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Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngesters under the age of 18. Some psychologist claim that the basic reason for this is that children thesedays are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers. To what extent you agree or disagree ?

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According to some psychologist nowadays there is an increase in juvenile crime due to the lack of appropriate
parents
' attention to their
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offsprings
 and shortage of social and mental education in the institutions and I agree that
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 factors are major of the reasons.
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Current
parents
 trying to hard work to meet families' requires and feed their
children
 often miss their
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 duties to
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behave
 their
children
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 spending all their
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aproaching
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 work promotions to earn more money often forgot about their
children
 who suffer from needs of
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' attention and love. That
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 often become aggressive and known as badly
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 pupils who trying to get attention
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 more anxious and rebel. A lot of that
children
 most of their
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 being alone sometimes can not understand any sense of respect to the rules of society or laws. Being most of
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 at school, it is teachers after families, who can find out about
children
 issues and could support
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 in the
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 the criminal world.
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 system should provide
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appropriate
 psychological tools to detect that
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 youth and help them. Teachers and mentors having
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 qualification need to work with
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suffer
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children
 and teach them about
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 of that criminal activities.
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according
 to one study, a lot of crimes were
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 by youngsters due to peers pressure and teachers being more involved in
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 lives of their pupils could
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 issues. In conclusion, I believe that there are many reasons for the current crime rate among young people but the key reason is the absence of the sufficient educational process in families and education facilities.
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