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Band 5.5

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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 of cars are increasing in several cities of the world in the
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 three decades which is a major cause of
traffic
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 jam issues.
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 believe that
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 it can be
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 awful condition for all
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humans. Steps which should
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 by
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 to reduce
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this problems
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 are mentioned in
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 paragraphs. Nowadays,
population
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 is rapidly increasing in several countries.
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, the number of
four wheelers
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 are
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 rising. In many homes, every people have
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 separate 4-wheel.
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, due to
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 their time citizen afford to travel with their own vehicle
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 of public transports. Because of that reason in rush hours like morning and evening people are suffering
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 long distances
traffic
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 jams.
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contrary
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, to solve
this
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 problem government should take steps in
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 way. There are several ways for government to reduce
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 problem.
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, they should decide
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limit of cars for each family.
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, each family can purchase only 1or 2 cars so, because of
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 number of
automobile
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 will decrease and pollution as well.
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, public transportation should be free in
city
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the city
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 area. If there are no charges on public transport ,so it can be a reason to influence people to travel in buses and trains which can be a major factor to decrease
traffic
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 issues. In conclusion,
traffic
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 issue is a controversial issue for all among the world but mentioned measure can be beneficial to reduce it.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

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