In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is a common practice in Britain and other European countries that when people grow old and are not able to take
care
of themselves, they get enrolled into old age homes nearby. On most ,occasions families take
care
of the bills
however
sometimes government pays. I think it is an option not to be
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on who has to pay because that totally depends on the family. I will explain some situations of when
family
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can or cannot take
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responsibility. If we take a wider look most people in Britain live in nuclear families and have two or more
children
. In a situation of an early marriage offsprings usually are matured when their
parents
get old and most
children
work part-time while doing their graduate studies. In an environment where
children
are
are
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taught to live independently without interfering with their working
parents
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they tend to be more responsible. Some of these qualities make them feel accountable for everything happening in their family. They
also
feel the need to take
care
of their
parents
like they were taken
care
of. In
such
cases
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bills or payments to organisations looking after their
parents
can be taken
care
of
their
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family members. There are
children
who have been raised by
a
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single parent or cohabiting
parents
. It is a well-known fact that a child needs to be raised in a healthy environment where it is loved and nourished by everyone around.
Children
are spoilt and become vulnerable when they are exposed to bad behaviours
such
as harassment. They do not understand the concept of love and affection. They become irresponsible, lack confidence, feel insecure and sometimes even question their own existence. In
such
cases when
children
are devoid of their own well being it is impossible to expect them to take
care
of their
parents
and pay for them.
This
is when the government has to help the elderly by funding the old age homes to take
care
of them. To conclude, a person who is emotionally attached to his family and has a good heart will always thrive towards helping the family members in all ways.
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, someone with the opposite can never be depended upon.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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