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New technologies provided machines which replaced workers to do certain physical jobs and tasks. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#technologies #machines #workers #jobs #tasks
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It is very much true that
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advanced
technologies
 are growing like anything in all ways.
Therefore
, a fair amount of people
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 automation can replace manpower at the workplace and I would like to express my viewpoints on the pros and cons of new
technologies
 in
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different industries. To embark
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, nowadays machines are playing a vital role in many construction departments and there are many advantages if we replace the manpower with new
technologies
 at the workplace.
Firstly
,
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superb
technology
 can reduce a lot of manufacturing
time
,
hence
 customer demands can be satisfied on
time
.
Secondly
, advanced
technology
 can
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 the future demands in advance and at the same
time
 manufacturing department can plan
accordingly
 for their manufacturing requirement process.
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last
 but not least
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technology
 can help us to get quality
outcome
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outcomes
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 without any
flaw
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flaws
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.
For example
, if we
ordered
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 one product on eBay or Amazon, we will get the product the next day only
due to
 the
technology
 innovation.
However
, undoubtedly, there are a few failures and disadvantages
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 using
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high
technologies
at
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 the workplace. if we introduce new
technology
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then
 the production cost will be very high.
On the other hand
, The company has to go through frequent updates in their production planning process as we are getting
back to back
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 new changes in the automation and software process. As per a recent Google survey finding,
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production failures and recalls are increasing by 5% every month and it may lead to
customer
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customers
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 unhappy with the products and services.
To sum up
,
technology
 can help us to get fast and quality goods and services but at the same
time
 manpower must have
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 understanding and control
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 these machines.
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