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It is more important to have a good family than to have friends. Family can always compensate for absence of friendship. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#friends #absence #friendship
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It is very much true that family is forever.
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, a fair amount of people believes that family
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 are stronger than friendships and I strongly agree with
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family is important in an advanced society. To embark on, family
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builds
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 and it is going to support us in all the ways.
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, the family consists of certain great bonds which cannot be replaced by anyone,
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 the amount of family support is really priceless.
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, family is everything
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full of trust and hope and nowhere we cannot see
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a great
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great relations
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relations
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 except in family. And
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 but not the least, blood
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 are growing from one generation to another generation
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 it is all about parents and child
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 the family.
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, undoubtedly, friendship is helping to
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avoid
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strees
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stress
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thoughts but cannot replace the family bond. A friend will be in our life only for time being but cannot have these
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continusely
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continuously
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recent Google survey findings, family
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 are 75% solid
stonger
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stronger
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friendship
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 and
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 few
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news papers
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 shared that blood
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 will give great moral support even when we are in crisis. To sum up, family is
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great hope, trust and confidence too which we can have
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 any point
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 time but friendship is only for few days just to have fun and share the viewpoints.
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