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1- Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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 current era work became
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 important part of everyone's life.
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 folks like to become
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 own boss
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 select to do their own work like they want to become self -employed because they thought they can earn much more money if they do work
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 their own
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 they don't need to sign any contracts and do their job in easy and
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comfortable
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 nowadays so many
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 using youtube and upload their content with
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 side,there are
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 of becoming a self -employed
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 as companies are very struggling because they don't have enough employees to run their business.Organizations need younger employees to succeed
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 business with some latest and good ideas.
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 companies closed their doors because they don't have enough staff. To conclude, it is very good for some
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 and earn money with their own hardware.But big companies are very struggling to find out new talent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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