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Full-time university students spend most of the time studying. They should be doing other activities too. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, the university is one of the most vital things for each student, and
students
 there spend their full
time
 studying.
However
, certain people think that
students
 should be doing other
activities
 too. On the one hand, university or college plays a relevant role in our lives and for most
students
/children get into university is one of the main goals.
Thus
, a person has to study a lot to get into uni and will have to study a lot into uni.
However
 spending
all-
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all time
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time
 reading a book and studying can lead to health or mental issues,
for example
, it can be stressful, which results in depression.
As a result
, these
students
 do not have any social skills since they are not able to spend
time
 with friends or in other events.
On the other hand
, any
activities
 are
also
 significant. Allocating some
time
 to any
activities
 has a lot of benefits. It can be a sports activity, the student should play some sports like football, basketball and so on. It will give the student some skills like teamwork and social skills.
However
, dedicating full
time
 to sports must not be the main priority. The main priority must be education! To sum up, I think that it is necessary to give more
time
 to education,
however
,
students
 have to act in other
activities
 too.
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