In today's job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, a great deal of attention has been paid to the diversity of education and human resources. Some
people
insist that working experience are more important than academic criteria. I strongly agree with
this
because
people
hardly care about one's degree and there are enough shreds of evidence that prove
people
without college degrees are capable.
To begin
with, the
first
reason why I support
this
is that
people
have little interest in academic criteria. In fact, 45 per cent of the Japanese do not know which
university
do their co-workers graduated from, while around 95 per cent of them care about job performances.
In addition
, human resource managers unlikely to ask job applicants to academic backgrounds
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new graduates. On top of that, the ranking of universities changes every year.
Therefore
judging
people
by the level of the
university
from which they graduated is not a smart idea.
In addition
to
this
, another reason why I support
this
is that there are
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of capable figures who do not go through higher education.
For instance
, Steve Jobs who started up the world's famous company Apple
,
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had dropped out from a
university
.
However
, Apple is now one of the top five companies of market capitalization. He was
also
the funder of PIXAR which is the largest animation firm in the world as well.
Furthermore
, there is another type of superior
people
who do not have an
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diploma. Today, teenagers can be an entrepreneur. As a matter of fact, a woman called RIKA SHIKI, launched her own business when she was a high school student, and it succeeded. To conclude, I reiterate my complete agreement with
this
topic.
This
is because formal qualifications have
fewer
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value on candidates, and there are many talented
people
who do not have
university
degrees.

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