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One problem faced by almost every larger city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest? 16.46

#city #traffic #congestion
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 the land was been turned into a playground, while the field
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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