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One problem faced by almost every larger city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest? 17.07 19

#city #traffic #congestion
The diagram illustrates information about the development at West Park Secondary
School
 since it's been built in the year 1950. Overall, as is clear from the diagram, the
houses
 had been replaced by a car park and a science block.
Furthermore
, the farmland changed into a sports
field
 for the
school
. In 1950, the
school
 has been built
next
 to a row of
houses
. The land by the
school
 was turned into a playground, whereas the
field
 by the
houses
 was farmland. In 1980, the
houses
 have been demolished and been replaced by a carpark and an extra science block.
In addition
 to the existing playground, the
school
also
 gained the farmland and converted it into a sports
field
. In 2010, the building of the
school
 has remained the same.
However
, the car park has been enlarged and the rest of the
field
 has been split in two, which became the sports
field
 and the playground.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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