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Nowadays, more people would instead purchase food than cook at home. ‎What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?‎

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Firstly
, the foremost reason for buying meals rather than cooking is ‎convenience. Because it takes time to prepare
food
 at home, many people prefer ‎to buy ready to eat meals.
Secondly
, purchasing
food
 from the market is cheaper ‎than cooking it at home.‎
For instance
, these days a number of
food
 ordering mobile applications operate in ‎the market and they offer great deals and discounts on
food
 orders.
Thirdly
, there ‎are different meal options when someone is buying
food
 from the market. ‎
Consequently
, there are several benefits to
this
 trend because of which there has ‎been a decline in home cooking in recent years.‎
On the other hand
, due to the rise of
this
 trend, the health of individuals is ‎deteriorating. Since people are not eating fresh and healthy foods, they are not ‎getting essential nutrients.
As a result
, obesity is on the rise which
further
 elevates ‎heart-related diseases. Research conducted by Harvard University suggests that ‎in developed countries, junk
food
 is the prominent cause of obesity and heart ‎issues.
Therefore
, the negative effects of
this
 trend are severe and life-threatening.‎ In conclusion, ready-made
food
 has become an integral part of a person’s ‎everyday life.
However
, considering the presented facts, I believe that
this
 practice ‎of buying readymade
food
 certainly brings more harm than good.‎
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