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The bar chart provides information about the main export items in Southland in the year 2000, 2010 and 2025. Overall, as can be clearly seen from the graph, international tourism experienced an increase in their numbers, while meat
products
 showed a downward trend.
Moreover
, dairy
products
 had some fluctuation during the years. In 2000, the number of international tourism started with just over 8
billion
, which was the highest in all three
products
.
This
 increased gradually to nearly 9 in 2010 and jumped to a peak of just under 10 in the final year.
In addition
 to Dairy
products
, it started with about 7 in 2000.
Then
 it rose sharply to approximately 10
billion
 in 2010, which was about 5
billion
 more than international tourism.
Finally
, the rate dropped 5 in 2025. In regards to Meat
products
,
this
 was the least popular product in the whole period. It began with 6 in 2000 and
then
 it fall steadily to 5,5 and reached 5
billion
 in the
last
 year.
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