Some parents are worried bout the increasing level if violence on TV, video games and other types of entertainment for children’s leisure. How does this affect children? How do you think problem can be tackled?

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Nowadays, there is an increase in the level of
violence
on Television,android
games
and all other types of entertainment channels for
children
's free time and
this
has
also
become a worry for parents.
This
essay discusses how these
games
can affect the juvenile population and ways of tackling
this
by encouraging students to play and watch educational
games
and locking applications that have
crime
-related subjects.
To begin
with, the primary impact on films and mobile
games
that entertain
crime
might influence a child to imitate.
Although
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crime
is not the intention of the game makers,still
children
start to follow that and end up committing a
crime
.
For Example
, In 2020 there was series of a murder mystery on a famous online platform,
this
show was not restricted to any age limit,It happened a student under 12 ton started watches
this
series and committed several crimes in a similar pattern.Another effect is ,it can
also
get addicted to
children
.If
this
happens,
children
will lose their interest in academics and focus only on getting entertained with these kinds of
violence
.
Thus
it is clear that
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criminal
games
can force a juvenile to commit a
crime
and
this
has become a worry for parents.
On the other hand
,
this
can be tackled by a couple of methods.
Firstly
,encourage the
children
to spend their leisure time watching something related to their academic or visual
games
which don't have
crime
.
For instance
,there is a number of channels and entertainments that promote learning,instruct the
children
to spend their time on these platforms.
Secondly
,all the violent platforms should be locked and only leave access to educational platforms,
this
will force them to watch and play the movies and
games
that they have access to.
Therefore
,parents ought to take initiative to encourage juvenile to focus on accemedics and incase any platform in the house or school which showcases
violence
should be blocked. In conclusion,Even though,
children
are addicted and imitating
violence
influence android
games
and movies,
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,still
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this
can be restricted by implementing application blocking and encouraging a child to focus only on educational related activities.Government should
also
take the initiative in banning these kinds of online and TV shows which showcase
crime
.
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