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below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the ‎UK, divided into three categories, from 1995- 2002.‎

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The bar chart demonstrates the duration of phone calls in the United Kingdom ‎divided into three different types, during eight years, commencing from 1995. ‎ overall, Looking at the details, domestic and overseas phone calls and mobile lines ‎accounted for increased telephone calls.
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, the number of local calls ‎showed a fluctuation. ‎ During
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 time in the UK, the quantity of national and international calls was ‎about 36
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minutes
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 in 1995 and swelled gradually to about 36
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 in 2002, approximately twice that
1995
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. Meanwhile, mobile calls showed ‎the same trend. The number of mobile phone calls went up significantly from only ‎about 2
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minutes
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 in 1995 to about 45
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 in 2002 and outlined ‎a dramatic rise, in fact, almost 28 times higher than in 1995. ‎
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, the number of local calls fluctuated over the times observed. It was ‎about 71
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 in 1995 and rose modestly to about 90
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 in 1998. ‎The figure
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 off and began to go down in 2002 and kept on falling ‎significantly until 2002 when the figure hit about 71
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minutes
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.
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, ‎the local fixed-line calls constituted the highest duration. The popularity of cell ‎phone calls increased steadily over the period.‎
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