shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different ‎educational settings in the UK in 2010.‎

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‎in 7 different countries. As is observed from the graph, in Canada,
US
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and ‎Denmark more
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phones
while
opposite
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trend ‎is true for Italy, Sweden, UK and Germany.‎ As is given in the bar graph, 90 citizens out of
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in Italy use
cell
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, ‎which is the highest rate among the given countries. In
this
country
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line
users
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lower (only 42 out of 100). The lowest rate of
cell
phone
owners ‎could be found in Canada where only 38%
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use
cell
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. The
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line
users
in Canada exceed 60%.
US
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have almost 49% mobile
users
‎compared to their 67%
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landline

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line
users
. German, UK and Sweden have more
cell
phone
users
than their
land
phone
users
. Interestingly Danish
people
owned more ‎than 80%
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phones
as well as
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and in
this
country per thousand ‎landline
users
were slightly higher than the
cell
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users
.
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,
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phone
is ‎more popular in
UK
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than the
land lines
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.‎ Overview, mobile
phone
is more popular in most of the European countries than ‎
land lines
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except Denmark while
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land
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line
is more popular among Canadian and ‎American
people
. ‎

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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