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shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different ‎educational settings in the UK in 2010.‎

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The supplied bar graph gives information on
land
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 and mobile
phone
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users
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 ‎in 7 different countries. As is observed from the graph, in Canada,
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 and ‎Denmark more
people
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 use
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phones
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 than mobile
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 while
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 trend ‎is true for Italy, Sweden, UK and Germany.‎ As is given in the bar graph, 90 citizens out of
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 in Italy use
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phones
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, ‎which is the highest rate among the given countries. In
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line
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users
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 ‎are
comparative
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 lower (only 42 out of 100). The lowest rate of
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 owners ‎could be found in Canada where only 38%
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people
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 use
cell
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phones
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. The
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line
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users
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 in Canada exceed 60%.
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 have almost 49% mobile
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 ‎compared to their 67%
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land
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line
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users
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. German, UK and Sweden have more
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 ‎
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users
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 than their
land
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phone
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users
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. Interestingly Danish
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 owned more ‎than 80%
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cell
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phones
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 as well as
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land lines
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 and in
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 were slightly higher than the
cell
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phone
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users
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.
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,
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cell
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a cell
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phone
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 is ‎more popular in
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the UK
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 than the
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land lines
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landlines
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.‎ Overview, mobile
phone
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 is more popular in most of the European countries than ‎
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 except Denmark while
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land
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 is more popular among Canadian and ‎American
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. ‎

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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