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shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different ‎educational settings in the UK in 2010.‎

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The supplied bar graph gives information on
land
phone
 and mobile
phone
users
 ‎in 7 different countries. As is observed from the graph, in Canada,
US
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 and ‎Denmark more
people
 use
land
phones
 than mobile
phones
 while
opposite
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the opposite
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 trend ‎is true for Italy, Sweden, UK and Germany.‎ As is given in the bar graph, 90 citizens out of
hundred
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a hundred
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 in Italy use
cell
phones
, ‎which is the highest rate among the given countries. In
this
 country
land
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landline
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line
users
 ‎are
comparative
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 lower (only 42 out of 100). The lowest rate of
cell
phone
 owners ‎could be found in Canada where only 38%
people
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of people
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 use
cell
phones
. The
land
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landline
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line
users
 in Canada exceed 60%.
US
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The US
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 have almost 49% mobile
users
 ‎compared to their 67%
land
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landline
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line
users
. German, UK and Sweden have more
cell
 ‎
phone
users
 than their
land
phone
users
. Interestingly Danish
people
 owned more ‎than 80%
cell
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phones
 as well as
land lines
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landlines
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 and in
this
 country per thousand ‎landline
users
 were slightly higher than the
cell
phone
users
.
Finally
,
cell
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a cell
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phone
 is ‎more popular in
UK
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the UK
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 than the
land lines
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landlines
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.‎ Overview, mobile
phone
 is more popular in most of the European countries than ‎
land lines
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landlines
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 except Denmark while
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the land
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land
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landline
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line
 is more popular among Canadian and ‎American
people
. ‎
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