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shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different ‎educational settings in the UK in 2010.‎

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illustrate
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 the
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 of study levels by genders ‎and
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 range in Glasgow, a city in Scotland, in 2010. The information provided ‎three various science levels: university degree,
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 certificate, and No ‎Qualification.‎ Overall, the
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 groups
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 a total of University Degree's training level in the ‎bar
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 was primarily colossal of five
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 items.‎ Regarding the pie
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, No Qualification has the highest
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 of ‎educational certification that any gender achieved with all
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.
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, ‎University Degree has a massive amount the most significant proportion from 21 ‎to 35
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 range (76%).‎
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, there is a subtle difference between
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 Certificate and No ‎Qualification at over 75
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, slightly more people who were without certificated ‎than men and women have a diploma in
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(72% and 3% respectively). In ‎terms of
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 Certificate, out of the five
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 ranges, each proportion from 16 to ‎‎75
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 ranges has slightly fluctuated 15% and 20% respectively.
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, it has ‎corresponded
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 of both genders (33%). Compared to, No Qualifications ‎aged 16 to 50 was one, and the same
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 is 9%.‎
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