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Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. What problems does this shortage cause? What measures could be taken to overcome these problems? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Every year,
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billions
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billons
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billions
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 of people lack access to
fresh
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freshwater
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water
 around the globe and
this
 issue is becoming worse as
the
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time passes by. The misuse of
water
 or its waste lead to economical and health problems which can
consequently
 affect the population. One of the main concerns
when we deal with
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this
 matter is
the
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drinking
water
. Not only it will be harder for people to have a simple glass of
water
, but food production can be deeply affected
with
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water
 shortage. Undoubtedly one of the measures which can be effective is
the
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water
 recycling or collecting
water
 from the rain to be used in toilet flush, gardening or car wash,
for instance
. Some developed countries already take
this
 initiative with great results. Another consequence of the lack of
water
 is the spread of diseases. Inadequate sanitization or the use of contaminated
water
have
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 a huge impact on public health, allowing diseases
such
 as cholera and hepatitis
spread
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to spread
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 among people,
for example
. Improving sewage systems can play an important role in the sense of reducing costs to treat the
water
 and reducing the
amount
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 of chemicals used. In summary, the reducing amount of potable
water
 can become a serious problem worldwide,
however
, taking preventive steps as recycling
water
 for general purposes and investing
on
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 strategies to treat efficiently the sewage, can slow the process down and avoid worse scenarios.
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