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illustrates the results from a survey of visitors to four types of tourist ‎attractions

The table illustrates the percentage of
students
 enrol in four different kinds of
schools
 from 2000 to 2009. Overall, it is clear that the proportion of
students
 attending specialist
schools
, grammar
schools
 and voluntary-controlled
schools
 decreased while
this
 figure for community
schools
 increased. In 2000, voluntary
schools
 headed for the proportion of
students
, at 52% which is higher than the percentage of pupils enrolling in grammar
schools
 (24%). 12% of
students
 attending specialist
schools
 and community
schools
 for each. In 2009, the percentage of pupils going to voluntary-controlled
schools
 declined dramatically to only 20%. Grammar
schools
 and specialist
schools
also
 saw a slight decrease, to 12% and 10% respectively.
In contrast
, 2009 witnessed a significant increase in student attendance in community
schools
, from 12% in 2000 to 58% in 2009.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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