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shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School ‎Types Between 2000 and 2009.‎

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The table graph explicates the gathered statistics of
children
 born to
women
 aged ‎‎40-44
years
 in Australia. The data is given since 1981, and it illustrates the figures ‎for 1981, 1986, 1996 and 2006. Overall, the proportion of
women
 who had given
birth
 to three or more
children
 had ‎considerably plunged, and mothers who had no
children
 were surged by each year.‎ In 1981, the utmost four or more infants were born by
women
 with the figures of ‎‎27.6%, but it was plunged from 1981 to 1996, and
finally
, it fell to 11.0% in 2006. ‎
Similarly
, the maximum proportion of
women
 who had given
birth
 to three
children
 ‎was 27.4
percent
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 and 27
percent
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 in 1981 and 1986. The remaining
two
years
 were ‎minimal in three
children
’s
birth
 by the
women
 aged 40-44.‎
Moreover
,
two
children
 were given
birth
 by more
women
 in the
years
 2006 and ‎‎1996. It was nearly correlative with 38.3% and 38.2% figures, while 29% of
two
 ‎
children
 were given
birth
 by
women
 in 1981.
However
, childless
women
’s number ‎upsurged in 1996 and 2006 from 12.8
percent
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 to 15.9%, but
women
 with no child ‎plummeted from 9.7
percent
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 to 8.5
percent
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 in 1981. In one child’s case, the ‎proportion decreased in the
first
two
years
 of the given graph
then
 dropped to 7.6 ‎
percent
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 in the
last
 year.‎
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