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shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School ‎Types Between 2000 and 2009.‎

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The table graph explicates the gathered statistics of
children
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 born to
women
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 aged ‎‎40-44
years
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 in Australia. The data is given since 1981, and it illustrates the figures ‎for 1981, 1986, 1996 and 2006. Overall, the proportion of
women
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 who had given
birth
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 to three or more
children
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 had ‎considerably plunged, and mothers who had no
children
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 were surged by each year.‎ In 1981, the utmost four or more infants were born by
women
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 with the figures of ‎‎27.6%, but it was plunged from 1981 to 1996, and
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, it fell to 11.0% in 2006. ‎
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, the maximum proportion of
women
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 who had given
birth
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 to three
children
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 ‎was 27.4
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 and 27
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 in 1981 and 1986. The remaining
two
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years
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 were ‎minimal in three
children
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’s
birth
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 by the
women
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 aged 40-44.‎
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,
two
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children
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 were given
birth
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 by more
women
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 in the
years
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 2006 and ‎‎1996. It was nearly correlative with 38.3% and 38.2% figures, while 29% of
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 ‎
children
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 were given
birth
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 by
women
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 in 1981.
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, childless
women
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’s number ‎upsurged in 1996 and 2006 from 12.8
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 to 15.9%, but
women
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 with no child ‎plummeted from 9.7
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percent
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 to 8.5
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 in 1981. In one child’s case, the ‎proportion decreased in the
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years
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 of the given graph
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 dropped to 7.6 ‎
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 in the
last
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 year.‎
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