Some people say that arts subjects such as painting or drawing should not be made compulsory for high school students. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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there are many pathways. One
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track is argued by many people that
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classes are not be incorporated in the course of teenagers. I completely agree, with
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,and will provide examples to strengthen my argument. The
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or rather the core
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are very lengthy and
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it is an
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, maths homework alone could take 2-3 hours a day in order to achieve respectable grades.
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getting an A grade will become impossible even for the brightest minds. So, it is an absolute necessity to gun your sole focus on these courses.
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, to the above argument,
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high school is considered a prominent
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when choosing your fields later on in
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, the contents of classes are not that challenging enough, as compared to what it will be in the higher studies but the children get the gist of the
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hesitation.
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the children will become lost in
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. To take out the
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in order to finish the homework poses a lot of challenges for young adults alone and in the
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captivates them. These reasons are enough to believe that these extra courses should not be added to
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