Eating too much sugar is bad for your health. Some people believe that it is the government's responsibility to limit sugar consumption, while others believe that it is individuals' responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and express an opinion

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of

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has been increased.it's

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be come

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huge

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problem for our

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and we have

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find ways to solve it.

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tend the

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play

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major part to decrease

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essay will discuss both sides

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will draw my personal opinion. On one hand, some

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think the

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responsible for

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problem.

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the

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should make a conference about

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health

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care management.

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awareness about

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of danger of diabetes.

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,let the

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diabetic

patients talk about there life with Insulin.regard

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thing on of my brother he had a diabetic sens he 10 years,always

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aware the children about the pain of

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advice

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them to reduce the

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intake.really he did a great job in our family.

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the

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should give the

people

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free

health

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food programs.like small paper in the mall for the weekly amount of

sugar

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does

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dose

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not affect the person's

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.

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, Some

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argue the individual

responble

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responsible

for his

health

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.To illiterate as a title (make your home always healthy)

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mean try to

replqce

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replace

the sweet in your home to something healthier.

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, By protein bar

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of kit kat.in additional,the parents should limit the sweet intake for their children,

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example

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make a selective time for eating unhealthy sweet,like twice

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weekly

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,do not make the sweet as

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full mark

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will give you a chocolate In conclusion,after careful analysis of both view.

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will go with the

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opinion,the

government

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responsible for awareness of

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about the consuming of

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.but small note,the individual should

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apply

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accept and follow the

menistry

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ministry

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health

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