Eating too much sugar is bad for your health. Some people believe that it is the government's responsibility to limit sugar consumption, while others believe that it is individuals' responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and express an opinion

These days,

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of

sugar

has been increased.it's

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be come

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huge

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problem for our

health

and we have

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to

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find ways to solve it.

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tend the

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major part to decrease

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this

essay will discuss both sides

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will draw my personal opinion. On one hand, some

people

think the

government

responsible for

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problem.

moreover

the

government

should make a conference about

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health

care management.

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awareness about

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the level

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of danger of diabetes.

furthermore

,let the

dibetic

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diabetic

patients talk about there life with Insulin.regard

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thing on of my brother he had a diabetic sens he 10 years,always

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aware the children about the pain of

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,he

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them to reduce the

sugar

intake.really he did a great job in our family.

also

the

government

should give the

people

free

health

food programs.like small paper in the mall for the weekly amount of

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not affect the person's

health

.

On the other hand

, Some

people

argue the individual

responble

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responsible

for his

health

.To illiterate as a title (make your home always healthy)

that is

mean try to

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the sweet in your home to something healthier.

for example

, By protein bar

instead

of kit kat.in additional,the parents should limit the sweet intake for their children,

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make a selective time for eating unhealthy sweet,like twice

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weekly

.

moreover

,do not make the sweet as

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will give you a chocolate In conclusion,after careful analysis of both view.

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will go with the

first

opinion,the

government

responsible for awareness of

people

about the consuming of

sugar

.but small note,the individual should

to

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accept and follow the

menistry

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ministry

of

health