Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, social
media
is increasing its
pupularity
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popularity
with the general population.
Although
personal
infornation
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information
being shared on the web can have negative effects.
This
essay will shed light on some pros and cons of the use of social
media
.
Fistly
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, it is believed that social
media
is a magnificent tool
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has been a point of no return when talking about ways people communicate. Recent statistics have shown that people get in touch with each other 90% more
eficently
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efficiently
than what the previous generation used to do. There is no doubt that communication paths have evolved dramatically thanks to the web and social
media
.
On the other hand
, the use of technology has not only become a security risk for our generations but
also
a safety one. A recent BBC report spoke about how people cards are being wrongly used by scammers while using social
media
or when trying to purchase products from marketing campaigns shown by the most popular social websites.
however
, in many of these
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the
scamm
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scam
could have been prevented by following some of the online purchases
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advice
advices
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shared by
facebook
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as well as
instagram
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. To sum up,
although
there
are
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some risk of using social
media
and the web, the benefits outweigh the negative aspects. In my
opinion
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a key point to make our social network
experice
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experience
more enjoyable and safe would be to avoid sharing personal information in places where the
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access
is public and to read reviews before trusting
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online shop. In my personal experience following these
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I have never been
imvolved
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involved
in an
unpleasent
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unpleasant
circustance
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circumstance
circumstances
.
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