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Nowadays, heavy traffic congestion has become a challenging problem in many cities.In this esssay, i will discuss about the reason behind this problem and the possible solution for traffic congestion.

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Nowadays, heavy
traffic
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congestion
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 has become a challenging problem in many cities.In
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 will discuss
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the reason behind
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 problem and the possible solution for
traffic
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congestion
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. One of the major reasons is that the ownership of
vehicles
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 has increased in the past few years which leads to
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the soaring
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 number of automobiles on
roads
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. The
vehicles
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 are now twice many as in the past by the measure of the
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.
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, in many cities, the infrastructure for public
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 is not fully developed and it is not available for the entire day.
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, many cities around the world are not built with proper planning and
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 there are narrow
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 which obstruct
people
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 from commuting. I personally think that free public
transport
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 is certainly a great idea, but it is not
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 way to ease
traffic
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congestion
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. It is true that round the clock free public
transport
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 can reduce the occurrence of
traffic
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congestion
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 because in most cases
traffic
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 issues are caused by the presence of a large number of private
vehicles
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 on the road. If public
transport
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 services are provided free of cost and their frequency is increased, few
people
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 will want to drive their personal
vehicles
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.
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 will theoretically reduce the number of cars on the
roads
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 and ease
traffic
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congestion
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. On the flip side,
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when there are too many takers for
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free public
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, buses and trains will become overcrowded.
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 will make the journey uncomfortable and many
people
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 will have to stand all the way.
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, affluent commuters will choose not to use public
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.
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, they will drive their own car to work and the
traffic
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 situation will get worse again.
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 why certain measures should be taken to deal with
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 situation.
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,
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government
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 should increase the quality of public
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 by providing frequent services
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 as improving the frequency and reliability of buses and trains.If
people
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 can ride comfortably on a bus or a train and still reach their destination on time, they will definitely consider that option.
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, fares of
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 transportation should
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 be reduced in order to promote it. Another measure is to construct wide
roads
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 and bridges. so that
traffic
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 can move smoothly during peak hours.
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, separate cycle lanes should be constructed and
people
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 should be encouraged to ride bicycles.
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,major city centres or crowded places of the city must be declared
car free
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 and fine should be imposed on those who do not follow the rules. To sum up, solving the
traffic
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congestion
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 problem is one of the biggest
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 for the
government
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.
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, by developing the public transporting system and making the rules strictly,
i
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 believe that the
traffic
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congestion
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 will be reduced to
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 certain extent.

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