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Many people believe that we should protect all wild animals while others believe we should just protect some of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Whether to protect
animals
 in the wild or not is divided people into two. While there are some supporters who advocate that the entire creatures required to be saved, the opponents consider only certain species are rescued. In my opinion, I support the former’ s view as any extinction could break the whole ecosystem.
This
 essay shall view both arguments and point out my consideration along with a conclusion. On the one hand, proponents think that forest
animals
which
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are
essential
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 part of nature irrespective of their nature and I back
this
 concept.
In other words
, extinction of creatures from the face of the earth has
far- fetched
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 repercussions: death of its predators and unprecedented growth of its
pray
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,
this
consequently
 results in the existence of, even,
human
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 population as well. To illustrate
this
, When frogs are diminished, snakes started declining, whereas grasshoppers’ number increased dramatically and rice fields were attacked;
therefore
, a balance should be there, and all
animals
 should be protected from poaching and hunting.
Nevertheless
, the opposite viewers that most
of
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critically
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 endangered species are cruel and harmful to humans.
Although
this
 notion seems to be had certain valid justifications, the
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 of the selective protections may not be fruitful since lives
in
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the
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earth are interconnected and
inter-related
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. They may argue that,
for instance
, if dinosaurs had lived here, the sapiens would have vanished.
This
 notion is observed as unscientific because the vanishing was
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part of
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 in order to limit the growth of the species.
Thus
, I think
this
 belief under no circumstance should give support. In conclusion, despite people have different points on what kinds of
animals
 need to be rescued, I firmly think everyone deserves to be saved.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • conservation status
  • ecological significance
  • holistic approach
  • endangered species
  • natural heritage
  • unforeseen negative impacts
  • economically non-viable
  • prioritization
  • ecosystem balance
  • conservation efforts
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