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In some country people have to find work abroad. They have to move from family and friends. Do the advantages outweight the disadvantage

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the
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 contemporary era, there is an argument over an issue that in certain nations , individuals migrate to a plethora of foreign country to find work , but they have to leave
theirs
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 homes as well as their close ones. Despite
of
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having certain merits of
this
 trend,
demirits
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demerits
 clearly outweigh its advantages. On one hand , the masses get the opportunities to learn
culture
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 and traditions of other countries. To elaborate it, if any person
immigrate
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to
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abroad to do jobs , it will play a tremendous role in their life. Due to
this
 , they met various local citizens and it is extremely easy for them to learn their culture and traditions.
For example
, the headline in 'Moscow Time ' revealed that every year Indians move
to
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abroad for
an altruistic jobs
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,
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 aid them to know their rituals.
Hence
, moving to any foreign nation for a person plays a crucial role.
On the other hand
 , the folks have to face
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mental health issues. To elaborate it, since the trend of
immigrate
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 to any country has rocketed, individuals have to suffer from loneliness
like
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problem and
this
 paves the way to
the
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depression, anxiety, tension and so on .
For instance
, according to the survey by 'WHO
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' the French citizens maximum suffer from these mental problems because they cannot leave their family.
Although
 migrate to abroad has benefits , disadvantages
of
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it
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cannot be neglected. To conclude, even though immigration to
foreign
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a foreign
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 country assists individuals to learn their rituals,
negative
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the negative
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 of
this
 trend clearly surpasses its merits.it is predicted that in future on one goes
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abroad.
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