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Some people think that using animals for experimentation purpose is cruel but other people that it is necessary for the development of science. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Animal experimentation has been a topic of debate for the past decades. Some experts feel that it is beneficial to
use
animals
 for testing,
while
 others opine that it is a brutal method.
This
 essay will discuss both views in depth, why it's good to
use
animals
 for science; and why in my opinion, testing them is cruel. The main benefit of animal testing is that it helps in the development of new drugs. As medical science advances, over decades, researchers try hard to find the cure for many incurable diseases.
Latest
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 medicines formulated by pharmaceutical companies
test
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 on
animals
 before the drugs used in human clinical trials, which has
lead
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 to many medical discoveries involving
animals
.
For example
, in the 1920s, the
use
 of insulin for
treatment
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the treatment
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against
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of
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 diabetes
on
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in
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 dogs.
Hence
, it is an advantage in the medical field.
Although
 using
animals
 for experiments has brought a lot of improvement in the scientific field, some oppose it. Humans have no moral right to conduct experiments on
animals
, as the research purpose cannot justify their suffering. Some
animals
 have died after each trial, either
due to
 harmful chemicals or injuries.
For instance
, cosmetic brands test their skin and eye care products on rabbits causing skin and eye irritation.
Therefore
, it is unnecessary experiments can cause harm to
animals
. In conclusion,
animals
 are not humans, so they should be equally respected.
This
 essay discussed why in today's world, animal experimentation is beneficial, but at the same time
why
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it's a sadistic thing to experiment on them. I
reinstate
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 that it's vicious to
use
animals
 in testing laboratories at the cost of gaining scientific knowledge.
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Task Response
Task Response: The essay provides a good discussion of both views and the writer's opinion, addressing the task prompt effectively. However, provide a more balanced approach by giving equal weight to each perspective.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: The essay demonstrates a generally clear and organized structure, with identifiable introduction and conclusion. Ensure smoother transition between ideas and paragraphs to enhance overall coherence and cohesion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Animal experimentation
  • Cruelty
  • Ethical dilemmas
  • Medical breakthroughs
  • In vivo testing
  • In vitro testing
  • Bioethics
  • Alternative methods
  • Regulatory oversight
  • Vivisection
  • Animal welfare
  • Pharmacological research
  • Toxicology
  • Clinical trials
  • Moral imperatives
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