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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The
two
 pictures illustrate how the
wave-enery
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wave-energy
wave-every
machine
 is designed and
different
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the different
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 options to locate the
machine
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
this
 machinery is initiated by water and
go
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goes
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 through chambers
consisted
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consisting
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 of turbines in order to generate
the
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apply
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electricity generator.
Moreover
, there are
two
 options to consider in terms of where to place the
machine
 and their corresponding costs
due to
 the altitude of
waves
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the waves
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. The process begins with the entry of
wave
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a wave
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 which will raise the water level in the first chamber, at the same time, there is an
air flow
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airflow
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 entering the
second
 chamber at the top causing the first turbine to spin.
By increasing
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Increasing
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 the height of
water
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the water
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 will make the blades of the
second
 turbine
the
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apply
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spin, which is located below the first one. The turning motions of the
two
 turbines will
generates
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generate
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 the electricity generator, which will produce electricity.
In addition
, there are
two
 considerations to make about the locations of the wave-energy
machine
 which are the size of the waves and the cost
for
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of
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 installing the
machine
. If
this
 machinery is
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a place
the place
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place
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placed
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 where it is close to the shore
then
 the installation costs will be cheaper compared to placing it
further
 from the land, but it will receive only small waves.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 4 times.
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