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Psychologists have known for many years that color can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention should be given to color schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals. How true is this statement? How far does color influence people's health and capacity for work?

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Since many years ago, psychologists have believed that
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 might affect our feeling and perception
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 something.
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, it suggested that we pay more attention to the choices of the
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 that we will apply, especially for offices or hospitals. I completely agree that people's minds are easily affected
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 the contrast of
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 it might
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 impact their work rate or
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 condition. One reason that
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 may have an impact
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 our
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 can be found in most hospital buildings.
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 of them implement white as their wall paint for the sole reason, it represents cleanliness.
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, patients who believe that they are being treated in a sterile environment are more likely to focus while resting.
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,
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having that kind of positive perception, it may produce a huge impact
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 the patient mind and
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 them to maximum recovery. Another reason in
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health
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 area is the usage of green
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 in spa facilities.
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 represents the
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 of nature and it
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 relaxing sensation. People who come to the spa usually want to relieve their intense stress, and it is
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general knowledge that blend with nature is one way to achieve
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 a calm moment.
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, in terms of working conditions, we often found that conventional office buildings use the
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.
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 it seems like a bit old-fashioned since
currently
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 many modern companies use more contrast
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 as yellow or orange for their decoration.
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, It
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 out that grey has a very suitable effect to be implemented for office interiors as it represents toughness, and
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 is a good personality trait to complete the
hard working
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 culture in the office. To conclude, there are many positive effects of using the correct
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color
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 for certain areas. For that, I believe that the choice of
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 is really important for facilities
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 as hospitals and working spaces to implement suitable
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.
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