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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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Numerous
companies
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 ensure that
employees
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 wear formal
clothings
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clothing
items of clothing
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, while others disregard appearances, focusing only on
work
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 output. In my opinion, I believe that
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 some
companies
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 enforce formal dress codes to seem attractive to investors and customers, they indirectly stifle
free thinking
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 and innovation from
employees
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.
Companies
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 without dress codes
promotes
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 the
later
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latter
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. It is well known within business circles that customers are more trusting of an organisation where the
employees
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 look professional and smart. Customers would patronize
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 businesses due to the confidence it induces.
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, angel investors would not hesitate to pour their funds into
companies
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 that have displayed professionalism along with
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formal
work
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 attire.
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, law firms, banks and insurance
companies
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 heavily enforce said
rules
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 to boost the image and attractiveness of their organisations. While dress codes aren't the only indicator of
work
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 quality, it contributes to the
companies
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 outlook.
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, enterprises without
rules
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 on
work
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 attire, tend to create an environment where
employees
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 can think and speak freely.
Such
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companies
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 promote
openmindedness
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 and innovation, focusing only on the result of
work
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.
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, it prevents a stressful or toxic
work
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 environment that could occur due to certain
unforseen
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unforeseen
 circumstances
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 as a bad hair or laundry day. The unlucky candidate could be suspended or worse, fired. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that
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 all
companies
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 should advocate for proper
work
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 etiquette within the
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workplace
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work place
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workplace
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,
rules
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 pertaining to
work
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 clothes could be more disadvantageous to the company. I recommend
conpanies
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companies
to
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be flexible in the enforcement of
such
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rules
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