Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.

Numerous
companies
ensure that
employees
wear formal
clothings
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, while others disregard appearances, focusing only on
work
output. In my opinion, I believe that
although
some
companies
enforce formal dress codes to seem attractive to investors and customers, they indirectly stifle
free thinking
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and innovation from
employees
.
Companies
without dress codes
promotes
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the
later
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. It is well known within business circles that customers are more trusting of an organisation where the
employees
look professional and smart. Customers would patronize
such
businesses due to the confidence it induces.
In addition
, angel investors would not hesitate to pour their funds into
companies
that have displayed professionalism along with
a
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formal
work
attire.
For example
, law firms, banks and insurance
companies
heavily enforce said
rules
to boost the image and attractiveness of their organisations. While dress codes aren't the only indicator of
work
quality, it contributes to the
companies
outlook.
In contrast
, enterprises without
rules
on
work
attire, tend to create an environment where
employees
can think and speak freely.
Such
companies
promote
openmindedness
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and innovation, focusing only on the result of
work
.
Furthermore
, it prevents a stressful or toxic
work
environment that could occur due to certain
unforseen
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unforeseen
circumstances
such
as a bad hair or laundry day. The unlucky candidate could be suspended or worse, fired. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that
although
all
companies
should advocate for proper
work
etiquette within the
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work place
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,
rules
pertaining to
work
clothes could be more disadvantageous to the company. I recommend
conpanies
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companies
to
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be flexible in the enforcement of
such
rules
.
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