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below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

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The chart shows how many male and female
students
 were studying full-time or part-time in
further
 education in Britain between 1970
/
71 and 1990
/
91. Overall, the vast majority of
students
 were part-time and there were more
students
 in 1990
/
91 than in 1970
/
71, especially women. Looking
firstly
 at part-time versus full-time study, it is clear that most
students
 were part-time in each year shown in the chart. The
number
 of part-time
students
 was over 700,000 per gender per year, going as high as 1.1 million, whereas for full-time study the
number
 was between 70,000 and 250,000. Moving on to look at gender differences, numbers of female
students
 increased in both full-time and part-time education whereas the
number
 of males in part-time education decreased.
For example
, there were 70,000 full-time and about 750,000 part-time female
students
 in 1970
/
71, but by 1990
/
91 these numbers had risen to over 200,000 full-time and around 1.1 million part-time. The
number
 of male full-time
students
also
 went up from around 100,000 in 1970
/
71 to over 200,000 in 1990
/
91, whereas for part-time study their numbers went down from 1 million in 1970
/
71 to around 850,000 in 1980
/
81, before rising slightly to about 900,000 in 1990
/
91.
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